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Swedish Elkhound-Lit

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      She tugged on my fur like I was a teddy bear, Her tiny fingers curled in my thick gray mane. My fluffy tail is her blanket of warmth. She laughs and giggles at everything I do. And I laugh at the joy she so easily receives. As she rests on her mother's lap to sleep- My master and I slip from the cabins nest. Evening approaches as dusk settles in the air. My ears pricked for the slightest of sounds, I keep my nose pointed down- for the scent of elk. It fills my nostrils as if they stood before me. A bark emanates from deep within me, Then I dash across the snow-covered terra. My master followed at a distance, trusting my senses. My prey cannot hide its tracks along the forest floor. And before they know it I am upon them. The bull turns to face me to protect his does. He will not fear me nor do I fear him as he charges. I dodge his antlers with the swiftness of a ghost, I sink my teeth into his hind leg then release quickly. He calls out in pain as he rings his head around. 'BANG! BANG! BANG!' The large animal collapses to the white ground, His blood spilling, turning the snow crimson red. My master steps forward to stroke my maned neck. And feeds me praise at the conquest we'd overtaken.

First off the image of the Swedish Elkhound above is NOT taken by me, the proper site it is from is [link]


The group :iconarctic-dogs: is having a contest and it's allowing Lit, so I thought it'd be fun to enter in a piece about a hunting arctic dog. So I choose the 'Swedish Elkhound' for this poem.
It's been awhile since I've written something in an 'animals' perspective. And it was fun.

If you're interested in entering go right ahead!

I still need to work on my pieces for 'Poetry screams prompt contest' and finish my script for the Simply Script contest from :iconplease-lit:


Critique:
I'm not quite sure about the last line, do you think it works with the rest of the piece or should I change it up a little more?
Also, how does the piece flow? Can you get the feeling of this dog good around kids by of the first paragraph? But at the same time being a fierce hunter by the way it tracks and goes at the elk?
Any personal improves me please let me know.



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