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(Contains: sexual themes and violence/gore)

      Shadows crawl along moldy walls,
      Daggered teeth bared in cracks and holes.
      She gasps within the nightmare,
      As large phantoms creep into her room.
      Daddy and mommy never hear her scream,
      For they now lay lifeless in crimson puddles.
      Dark trades exchanged in secret corners.
      Rooms in shadows with slow burning cigarettes.
      She stands on a pedestal barely clothed.
      Ghost white skin bare to intimate members.
      A scarlet shawl covers her face, haunting her eyes.
      Until one man growls his hunger and pays her toll.

      Sex doll, becomes her famous nickname,
      Hard as he desires, ravaged with deep aggression.
      Her cries are blotted out in her basement chambers,
      Blood and bruises are her constant reward.
      For the imprisonment of her master's game.
      When his itch is scratched he climbs on off,
      Out her chamber, the lights go out.
      She aches in the darkness, crying within her cage.

      There is no freedom, no hope for the light.
      A dirty little secret, a big 'ld lie.
      Greedy 'ld men, a girl's broken heart.
      The darkness hides the truth,
      Covers in the layers with bribed greens.
      Little girl cries in her brokenness.
      Locked in a hole of their evil trafficking.

I wrote this EARLY this morning, like at 1:00am or whatever.

Anyway, I read a piece recently about Human Trafficking and it made me realize I RARELY ever see a piece about the issue of HT, so I felt inspired to write about the topic when the right 'inspiration' struck me to write it down. Which was last night.

I've seen movies like 'Taken'. And recently saw an episode of Rizzoli & Isles about Human Trafficking. Which reinforced the desire/need/inspiration to write about the topic.



Feedback:
1: Did this piece make you think about the issue of Human Trafficking? Did it bring even a slight depth of embrace to this issue for you after reading it?
2: What does reading this piece make you feel?
3: The last line of the poem ' Locked in a hole of their evil trafficking.' does that sum up the piece well? Is the word 'evil' too soft of a term for this line? If it needs improving, how?
4: Was this piece plan enough to the reader to see the pain/brokenness, etc that Human trafficking inflicts on the girls/women (and I'm sure boys) who are tossed into the trade?
5: Any other comments/thoughts?

Also, do you think it needs a 'Mature tag' on it?
I tried to keep it fairly clean, but the issue altogether is a strong/mature one to talk about, it is in no way or form a clean topic to embrace.
So I don't know if the tag should or shouldn't be on.


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FCU777 Feb 27, 2013  Student Artist
Honestly human being are not objects that can be used and dumped. I am so strongly against human trafficking.
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Christianonfire7 Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I completely agree with you, it's such a sick thing that is going on that doesn't have enough expose showcasing it's darkness. I hope this piece can help in some ways, with showing the readers.
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FCU777 Mar 3, 2013  Student Artist
Yeah. Same here.
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rlkirkland Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hey kiddo!
Congratulations on your DLD feature.:sun:
Some things need to be heard by many, this will help!
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Christianonfire7 Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks, I'm hoping it will be heard by many, because yes this is something that needs to be brought to the light.
Thanks for the support. :)
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Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article. Keep writing and keep creating.
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Christianonfire7 Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so very much! :)
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Gurt-B-Froe Sep 8, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
... Human trafficking....... It is terrible...
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Christianonfire7 Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes it is. :(
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Gurt-B-Froe Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Indeed...
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