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(Contains: sexual themes and violence/gore)

      Shadows crawl along moldy walls,
      Daggered teeth bared in cracks and holes.
      She gasps within the nightmare,
      As large phantoms creep into her room.
      Daddy and mommy never hear her scream,
      For they now lay lifeless in crimson puddles.
      Dark trades exchanged in secret corners.
      Rooms in shadows with slow burning cigarettes.
      She stands on a pedestal barely clothed.
      Ghost white skin bare to intimate members.
      A scarlet shawl covers her face, haunting her eyes.
      Until one man growls his hunger and pays her toll.

      Sex doll, becomes her famous nickname,
      Hard as he desires, ravaged with deep aggression.
      Her cries are blotted out in her basement chambers,
      Blood and bruises are her constant reward.
      For the imprisonment of her master's game.
      When his itch is scratched he climbs on off,
      Out her chamber, the lights go out.
      She aches in the darkness, crying within her cage.

      There is no freedom, no hope for the light.
      A dirty little secret, a big 'ld lie.
      Greedy 'ld men, a girl's broken heart.
      The darkness hides the truth,
      Covers in the layers with bribed greens.
      Little girl cries in her brokenness.
      Locked in a hole of their evil trafficking.

I wrote this EARLY this morning, like at 1:00am or whatever.

Anyway, I read a piece recently about Human Trafficking and it made me realize I RARELY ever see a piece about the issue of HT, so I felt inspired to write about the topic when the right 'inspiration' struck me to write it down. Which was last night.

I've seen movies like 'Taken'. And recently saw an episode of Rizzoli & Isles about Human Trafficking. Which reinforced the desire/need/inspiration to write about the topic.



Feedback:
1: Did this piece make you think about the issue of Human Trafficking? Did it bring even a slight depth of embrace to this issue for you after reading it?
2: What does reading this piece make you feel?
3: The last line of the poem ' Locked in a hole of their evil trafficking.' does that sum up the piece well? Is the word 'evil' too soft of a term for this line? If it needs improving, how?
4: Was this piece plan enough to the reader to see the pain/brokenness, etc that Human trafficking inflicts on the girls/women (and I'm sure boys) who are tossed into the trade?
5: Any other comments/thoughts?

Also, do you think it needs a 'Mature tag' on it?
I tried to keep it fairly clean, but the issue altogether is a strong/mature one to talk about, it is in no way or form a clean topic to embrace.
So I don't know if the tag should or shouldn't be on.


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FCU777 Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Student Filmographer
Honestly human being are not objects that can be used and dumped. I am so strongly against human trafficking.
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Christianonfire7 Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I completely agree with you, it's such a sick thing that is going on that doesn't have enough expose showcasing it's darkness. I hope this piece can help in some ways, with showing the readers.
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FCU777 Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2013  Student Filmographer
Yeah. Same here.
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hey kiddo!
Congratulations on your DLD feature.:sun:
Some things need to be heard by many, this will help!
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Christianonfire7 Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks, I'm hoping it will be heard by many, because yes this is something that needs to be brought to the light.
Thanks for the support. :)
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2012
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by =DailyLitDeviations in a news article that can be found here: [link]

Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article. Keep writing and keep creating.
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Christianonfire7 Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so very much! :)
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Gurt-B-Froe Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
... Human trafficking....... It is terrible...
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Christianonfire7 Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes it is. :(
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Gurt-B-Froe Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Indeed...
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ALLforJESUS Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Jamie.... with subjects like this, I wish you didn't write so well! As emotional as this piece is, it probably BARELY scratches the surfact for those who have lived it! :(
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Christianonfire7 Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I don't think any writer could really scratch the surface of such a topic without going through it. But at least they can bring a certain awareness to the issue.

Thanks Ken.
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ALLforJESUS Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Well... you suceeded! :)
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SurrealCachinnation Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012   Writer
1: *Sobs* Okay, this actually made me cry a little... legit. I took a break from studying because I remembered your FB post about writing this and I was like oh, I should read that, it should be interesting, because it's a topic I care about, and--*SOBS* OH MY GOD.
2: *Sobs* I feel like I want to somehow save everysinglegirl who ever goes through this but I can't, and I hate pig-men like that who think girls are theirs for the taking, and it makes me really appreciate the good men out there, and WHY IS THE WORLD SO AWFUL?!
3: 'Evil' isn't exactly a soft term, in my opinion... it's something that can be overused, but when used to describe something that is truly evil, it's effective. I'd keep it.
4: *SOBS* YES.
5: This is one of the best pieces I've read from you... I can tell you are very passionate about this topic, and the images are vivid (painful) and just brilliant. Like I said, you made me cry. This is powerful.

Maybe a mature warning, but not restricted? Since it's a really sensitive subject, and the third stanza, I think, is a little graphic... not like, super graphic and nobody should read it ever, but... the images are pretty clear. Also, in that stanza, I think you want *itch, not inch. Typos, ftw?

sadklfn;lasnfesngf;awoehtni;aohnehn;ahne now I won't be able to focus on abnormal psych, because I'm going to be studying depression and stuff and think oh god I have no right to complain about anything ever because I've never been raped and I hate people and and and the world sucks and ugh. *sobs*
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Christianonfire7 Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:cling:

I added the warning and fixed the typo.

I'm like, so in awe of your comment, you are epic. I hope you know that.

This is definitely a deep subject, and it really does stir me up because nobody deserves that kind of life. I know there are a lot of bad people out there, people you see on Tv. but when you see them in person it's like. 'How can people really be that cruel, that heartless? It is suppose to be just in the movies that people are like that.'
It's sickening and sad and just... amazes me sometimes. :rage:

It most definitely makes you VERY grateful for the guys who are good men, the caring, thoughtful men with BRAINS. They become almost like angels after seeing those evil freaks.

Anyway, thank you for your comment buddy, and I'm very glad the depth in it was strong enough to make you cry. :hug:
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SurrealCachinnation Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012   Writer
Yes, exactly. It makes me really appreciate John, and all my male friends who aren't total pigs. They all respect women. They don't see women as objects to have sex with (even though that may be something they do and enjoy, but it's consensual, because rape and human trafficking are horrible and aldinaldntfalieta). I love them.

I wish it was possible to just STOP all this business. But as long as there are evil people, it will go on... we don't have unlimited resources. It makes me really sad. And what really makes me sad is how pushed aside this issue is. I get really mad at all the people who bitch about different social issues and the supposed 'war on religion' and complain about Obama smoking cigarettes and Romney's wife being a mother with no other job, and I'm like FOCUS ON THE ISSUES AT HAND, AMERICA. We can complain about superficial things after we've made sure our citizens feel safe in their own homes.
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Christianonfire7 Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Couldn't have said it better myself.

I was just talking to my dad earlier, we were watching the News and they were showing a Police chase in CA and he was all. 'With all the stuff going on in the world right now they are going to focus on a simple Police chase?'

It's like the news/people in power would rather focus on the small things instead of deal with the BIG issues. I know with just enough effort Human Trafficking, at least in the U.S could be knocked down, on a big scale if those in power were to TRY and do something about it.

But, that would be expecting some courage and strength out of them.
-facepalm-

At least some shows are bringing it to light as best that they can.
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SurrealCachinnation Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012   Writer
-facedesk-

Yeah.

All those things...
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